英文介绍...请帮我检查有无语法错误Hello everybody,my name is XXX.Today,I am honored to know you.In this week we will be learning together,living together.I'm a bright boy.And I have many hobbies.Like swimming,computer,and singing.But I

英文介绍...请帮我检查有无语法错误Hello everybody,my name is XXX.Today,I am honored to know you.In this week we will be learning together,living together.I'm a bright boy.And I have many hobbies.Like swimming,computer,and singing.But I
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Hello everybody,my name is XXX.Today,I am honored to know you.In this week we will be learning together,living together.
I'm a bright boy.And I have many hobbies.Like swimming,computer,and singing.But I singing did not sound.My friends said that my voice like duck call.
I take part in the activity cause is that I want to change myself.I want to be an independent man
So,I hope we have memorable days
Thanks
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英文介绍...请帮我检查有无语法错误Hello everybody,my name is XXX.Today,I am honored to know you.In this week we will be learning together,living together.I'm a bright boy.And I have many hobbies.Like swimming,computer,and singing.But I
But I singing did not sound 这里不要这么说吧I am not very good at singing
I take part in the activity cause is that I want to change myself
这里
I take part in this activity cause because I want to change myself
这样改似乎更好

"am honored"这个是被动态，应该为“am honoring”
第一行“in”改为“on”
“learning together, living together.”改为“learning and living together”

we will be learning together, living together
we wiil learn and live together
I'm a bright boy
I'm an active boy
Like swimming,co..
Such as swimming...

My friends said that my voice like duck call.
.....that my voice is horrible
I take part in the activity
......in the program

honored 在此形容词为受尊敬的。你想表达的是荣幸的。此单词有荣幸的意思，但是却是 动词，应改为privileged
In this week we will be learning together将be去掉
computer,and singing将逗号去掉
But I singing did not sound.我没有懂到你想表达的意思，不通顺
du...

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honored 在此形容词为受尊敬的。你想表达的是荣幸的。此单词有荣幸的意思，但是却是 动词，应改为privileged
In this week we will be learning together将be去掉
computer,and singing将逗号去掉
But I singing did not sound.我没有懂到你想表达的意思，不通顺
duck call 改为duck called
I take part in the activity cause is that I want to change myself其中cause is 是什么意思应该是because把

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先问一下，这个是你的写作方面的assignment还是口语方面的？
然后就是But I singing did not sound这句，你想表达你唱歌唱的不好，应该是but i dont sing very well.
My friends said that my voice like duck call这句可以改成my friends always laugh my voice...

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先问一下，这个是你的写作方面的assignment还是口语方面的？
然后就是But I singing did not sound这句，你想表达你唱歌唱的不好，应该是but i dont sing very well.
My friends said that my voice like duck call这句可以改成my friends always laugh my voice like a duck.
I take part in the activity cause is that I want to change myself这句应该是im now taking part in the activity coz i wanna change(or challenge) myself.
I hope we have memorable days可以改成i hope we may have memorable days.
如果是写essay之类的话，就要写的再学术一点了。
希望能有帮助=】

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"I am honored to "最好改成“It is my honor to...”,在英语中，一般是把自己放在后面，这样表示谦虚点。然后把today放到后面。In this week we will be learning togeher,living together"这句首先为了和前面有一定的连贯性，在句首要加一个And，然后去掉be，同时合并后面的learn与live，也就是“And ...

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"I am honored to "最好改成“It is my honor to...”,在英语中，一般是把自己放在后面，这样表示谦虚点。然后把today放到后面。In this week we will be learning togeher,living together"这句首先为了和前面有一定的连贯性，在句首要加一个And，然后去掉be，同时合并后面的learn与live，也就是“And in this week we will learn and live together.”
第二段But I singing did not sound 不要这么说，典型的中式英语，I am not very good at singing比较好。duck call改成duck calling.
I take part in the activity cause is that I want to change myself.改成The reason I take part in this activity cause is that I want to change myself.
最后，不要这样结尾，So,I hope we have memorable days 改成OK, hope we have memorable days,thank you!这样更加口语化，并且很亲切

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